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"And not only that but they're suspicious as fuck, 'oh hey, a Scifi message board, that'll be the perfect place to try and sell counterfeit currency, fake passports, or Segway Vacation Tours. Now body pillow cases of Anime'd Counselor Troi with vibrator pockets I can understand." - IkaikaKekai
@  Khas : (24 May 2017 - 10:39 PM) We really need to bring Gunbird back here.
@  IkaikaKekai : (24 May 2017 - 08:24 PM) I feel the need...the need to poke people.
@  Khas : (22 May 2017 - 08:07 PM) Banninating the Spambots!
@  Khas : (22 May 2017 - 08:07 PM) I am Trogdor the Banninator!
@  IkaikaKekai : (21 May 2017 - 10:00 AM) And now the russians with this roofing tile bullshit.
@  IkaikaKekai : (20 May 2017 - 08:29 AM) Fucking seriously? Again?
@  Khas : (19 May 2017 - 06:35 PM) Closer to the whole thing.
@  IkaikaKekai : (19 May 2017 - 08:04 AM) The whole thing or just the body pillow part?
@  Khas : (18 May 2017 - 10:56 PM) Quote of the Week!
@  IkaikaKekai : (18 May 2017 - 09:44 PM) Now body pillow cases of Anime'd Counselor Troi with vibrator pockets I can understand.
@  IkaikaKekai : (18 May 2017 - 09:42 PM) And not only that but they're suspicious as fuck, 'oh hey, a Scifi message board, that'll be the perfect place to try and sell counterfeit currency, fake passports, or Segway Vacation Tours.
@  IkaikaKekai : (18 May 2017 - 09:40 PM) And I can't imagine that such spam would be very successful either way. If it's on a busy forums that has a chance of being seen, it'll probably be caught and removed by an admin within an hour.
@  IkaikaKekai : (18 May 2017 - 09:32 PM) No but I mean, is this just a phishing scam that's poorly executed, or is there really some Segway Rental place in Italy that gave someone money to go spam message boards with their spiel?
@  Khas : (18 May 2017 - 07:23 PM) Who all have very similar IP Addresses.
@  Khas : (18 May 2017 - 06:55 PM) @Ikaika: The 7 Realms Sub-forum has been suffering spammers for quite a while.
@  BLACKFOOT : (18 May 2017 - 05:48 PM) Did you miss me?
@  IkaikaKekai : (18 May 2017 - 10:13 AM) Do companies actually pay money for message board spam, or was this just some malware/phishing bullshit?
@  Praeothmin : (16 May 2017 - 11:25 PM) Khans, I see Saefort is pulling out all the old Warsie bullshit arguments to claim SW superiority... :rolleyes:
@  Praeothmin : (16 May 2017 - 11:13 PM) We've had sub-kt firepower in SW for quite some time now...
@  Khas : (14 May 2017 - 10:40 PM) Still not fully sure, but an on-topic post at Starfleet Jedi has me on the fence.

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The Portal Conflict.

Fantasy Military SEAL Portal Conflict War Special forces Original story Fiction

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#1 Gunbird

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Posted 20 March 2017 - 12:32 AM

Ok Im trying to make a sort of portal fantasy with a military twist. It's mostly going to follow a platoon SEAL were they go though into a fantasy world. Here is the prologue.

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    I know this message will not see the light of day before six years, if ever, but there’er some things that I need to get off my chest about what is now called the “Portal Conflict.”

Don’t get me wrong. I'm not someone who goes around wearing a flower in my hair, or a Guy Fawkes mask on my face. I do not regret  serving in one of the country's most badass special forces, the Navy SEALs. But I do regret telling the higher ups that they were in way over their heads.

 

Just because the rescue mission into that other world was a success, and it was the only ‘good’ reason to go in there  in the first place, it does not mean that the operations after that will be a cake walk.

If you have an enemy that can liquefy metal, shoot lighting bolts, and give you a mind fuck with a few words, you should take them seriously.

But despite all the bullshit me and my brothers have to go through,  with both combat and  politics, I would do this all over again.

Besides, it felt like I was playing D&D again…kind of.

 

                                                                                                                     

                                                                                                                               Brian O'Casey (Need a rank and what team he in)

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#2 Khas

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Posted 20 March 2017 - 12:43 AM

Well, technically it's "Guy Fawkes" who it's a mask of.  Other than that, nothing to really nitpick about.  It looks good so far.  The prologue reminds me of the pre-chapter quotes from fanfics like "Tiberium Wars", "A New Terror", and "The Tides of History".


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Posted 20 March 2017 - 02:16 AM

Thanks for the feed back I'll try to get the first chapter up soon.






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