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@  Khas : (06 June 2017 - 03:42 PM) The pic in question.
@  Khas : (06 June 2017 - 03:41 PM) http://www.deviantar...Night-635598384

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The Portal Conflict.

Fantasy Military SEAL Portal Conflict War Special forces Original story Fiction

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#1 Gunbird

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Posted 20 March 2017 - 12:32 AM

Ok Im trying to make a sort of portal fantasy with a military twist. It's mostly going to follow a platoon SEAL were they go though into a fantasy world. Here is the prologue.

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    I know this message will not see the light of day before six years, if ever, but there’er some things that I need to get off my chest about what is now called the “Portal Conflict.”

Don’t get me wrong. I'm not someone who goes around wearing a flower in my hair, or a Guy Fawkes mask on my face. I do not regret  serving in one of the country's most badass special forces, the Navy SEALs. But I do regret telling the higher ups that they were in way over their heads.

 

Just because the rescue mission into that other world was a success, and it was the only ‘good’ reason to go in there  in the first place, it does not mean that the operations after that will be a cake walk.

If you have an enemy that can liquefy metal, shoot lighting bolts, and give you a mind fuck with a few words, you should take them seriously.

But despite all the bullshit me and my brothers have to go through,  with both combat and  politics, I would do this all over again.

Besides, it felt like I was playing D&D again…kind of.

 

                                                                                                                     

                                                                                                                               Brian O'Casey (Need a rank and what team he in)

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#2 Khas

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Posted 20 March 2017 - 12:43 AM

Well, technically it's "Guy Fawkes" who it's a mask of.  Other than that, nothing to really nitpick about.  It looks good so far.  The prologue reminds me of the pre-chapter quotes from fanfics like "Tiberium Wars", "A New Terror", and "The Tides of History".


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Posted 20 March 2017 - 02:16 AM

Thanks for the feed back I'll try to get the first chapter up soon.






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